Phân tích & sửa đề"In many places, people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages? " IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"In many places, people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

In many places, people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?

II. Kiến thức liên quan

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
    • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
      • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
        • Main idea: technologies separates family members and deter them from connecting with each other in a meaningful way.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase "prevent" tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea:  Some people think that they are with their children, but the fact is that they just stay in one place with their children while different people do different things in the same house
        • Example: if family members become too immersed in using their devices for individual recreational purposes, like checking their social media accounts or browsing their favourite websites, they may neglect their relationships with other family members. 
      • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
        • Main idea: time with their children or parents or spouses is so scarce (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: The amount of quality time that a family spends together is likely to reduce, negatively impacting family relations)
        • Supporting idea: With the fast pace of life combined with mounting pressure, people are always busy   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase "busy" tiếng anh
        • Example: 
    • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
      • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
      • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
        • Main idea 1: this phenomenon does help people to connect each other conveniently and fast
          • Supporting idea: Modern people across national borders can easily keep in touch with their family members via modern internet applications (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: thanks to developments in technology, devices such as smartphones, tablets and laptop computers have not only become an indispensable part of our lives but have also helped to make communicating with our friends and families much easier, particularly between those who are separated by long distances)  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng "Particularly" tiếng anh 
          • Example: 
        • Main idea 2: The modern lifestyle surely encourages freedom and independence among people of the same family
          • Supporting idea: Most young people now bear less pressure from their parents when it comes to making decision with regard to their personal lives.
          • Example: Most parents now allow kids to speak their mind and choose their job based on their own volitions
      • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
        • Main idea 1: technologies separates family members and deter them from connecting with each other in a meaningful way.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ "separate" tiếng anh
          • Supporting idea:  Some people think that they are with their children, but the fact is that they just stay in one place with their children while different people do different things in the same house
          • Example: 
        • Main idea 2: time with their children or parents or spouses is so scarce (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: people are becoming more and more career-oriented and are subsequently losing the balance between work and family life)
          • Supporting idea: 
            • With the fast pace of life combined with mounting pressure, people are always busy
            • It has become more common that family members are less available at home, even outside of official working time, leading to weakened family interactions 
          • Example: 
      • Conclusion: paraphrase intro câu 2 

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