Phân tích "In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 "Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic.

In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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• Dạng advantages & disadvantages có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Young people will learn not to give up easily when faced with difficult situations because the message instils in them a sense of confidence in their skills and qualities. 
        • Supporting idea: Such self-assurance might inspire them to work relentlessly without the fear of failure. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "without" tiếng anh
        • Example: 
          • For example, professional footballers, like Christiano Ronaldo, have spent many consecutive years honing their skills to become the top athletes.
          • For example, when learning a second language, which is a challenging and time- consuming process, children need to truly understand that hard work, and not talents, is conducive to enhancing proficiency. That way, they could stay motivated and keep on learning when they encounter setbacks. 
      • Main idea 2: It can also help children to develop a positive mentality and improve their resilience, all of which are necessary for their adult life.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Children from disadvantaged backgrounds might find solace in the notion that studying hard can lead to a prosperous career.
          • Telling children that effort leads to reward can encourage them to work hard night and day to achieve their goals instead of staying frustrated in their passivity.
        • Example: 
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea: It may mislead children into spending too much time and effort on the tasks in which hard work plays little role. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "effort" tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea:
        • Example: 
          • For example, a child wanting to be a professional singer may waste time on voice training without considering their lack of musical talents but still hope that they may achieve success one day. 
          • Similarly, most painters need to have a great and unique sense of aesthetics, which is considered as a rare talent and therefore cannot be acquired through hard work. 
      • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý main idea khác: 
        • Main idea: Believing that hard work alone is enough can breed frustration, delusion, or even mental illness. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "frustration" tiếng anh 

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