Giải đề "Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. Why do parents do this? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi 21/10/2023 & 24/2/2024)

Bên cạnh hướng dẫn thêm cách phân tích cũng như bài sửa kĩ càng của học sinh IELTS TUTOR đã đi thi ngày 22/8 nhé, IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn kĩ Phân tích đề "Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. Why do parents do this? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. Why do parents do this? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?

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  • Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1 Why do parents do this?
    • Main idea 1: The predominant factor leading to this phenomenon is the competitive attitude among parents  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: this parenting trend can also be attributed to cultural norms HOẶC: Parents compete with their friends (reunions are mostly to brag about your kids)  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ "boast" tiếng anh
      • Supporting idea:
        • They have a feeling of pride when their child excels in various fields and often associate it as matter of their status in society   (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Peer pressure has urged parents to push their kids harder in order to become the most accomplished individuals and bring honor to their family)
        • Children’s fulfillment will mirrors on what happens around them and parents believe that achieving much in life is a good reflections.
      • Example: In most Asian countries, children doing poorly at schools are considered a disgrace to their families.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ "argue" tiếng anh
    • Main idea 2:  life is a race for success, so parents may fear that they are not doing enough to position their child for future achievements and that their child might be left behind
      • Supporting idea:
        • Parents often force their children to engage themselves in various activities both of academic and non-academic nature as they believe competency in different areas is required for a successful life in future  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng "even" 
        • In order to win the race and be honoured as a so-called “successful” person, one must constantly compete with others.
      • Example: My aunt Ly's ambitious push for Michael to excel in numerous activities is causing him to feel overwhelmed and stressed, highlighting the need for a balance between striving for success and allowing children to pursue their own interests and enjoy leisure time.

  • Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2 Is this a positive or negative development for the children?
    • Main idea 1: Chronic stress over how to achieve exceptional grades and outstanding performance in extracurricular activities may put young people at risk of developing depression, sleep deprivation and other mental conditions   (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: When children feel the enormous pressure to meet their parents high expectations, there are tendencies that they will suffer from mental health and sleep deprivation)  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng giới từ "regarding" tiếng anh
      • Supporting idea: 
        • This, in turn, may lead to various negative repercussions such as deterioration in their mental health owing to depression or anxiety.
        • In some circumstances, it can even lead to situations wherein the child may decide to run away from home because of his inability to deal with the stress.
      • Example: According to WHO, for instance, one in every five children between the age group of 13 and 15 in Sri Lanka suffer from depression due to parental pressure. 
    • Main idea 2: By focusing solely on achievements, high-pressure parents have taught their kids to fear failure and become unwilling to take risks. 
      • Supporting idea: This is detrimental because people can only succeed if they are allowed to fail, make mistakes and learn from them.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng từ "by" tiếng anh
      • Example: The constant pressure to excel and fear of failure instilled by high-achieving parents can hinder a student's personal growth, limiting their ability to develop crucial skills like resilience and adaptability necessary for real-world success.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

Nowadays, many parents tend to exert excessive pressure on their children to achieve success. This trend stems from various social and psychological motivations, but it often has far-reaching consequences for children’s development.

One of the main reasons why parents adopt such a high-pressure parenting style (lối nuôi dạy con đầy áp lực – a parenting approach that imposes high expectations and demands) is the status-conscious culture (văn hoá coi trọng địa vị – a culture where social standing matters a lot) prevalent in many societies. Parents often equate (đồng nhất – to consider one thing to be the same as another) their children's achievements with their own self-worth and social standing. For instance, in many Asian societies, parents boast about their children’s academic excellence during family reunions, considering it a badge of honor (niềm tự hào – a symbol of pride or achievement). In such environments, children are pushed to attain top results to safeguard (bảo vệ – to protect from harm or danger) the family's reputation. Another key factor is the fiercely competitive world (thế giới cạnh tranh khốc liệt – a world where people must strive constantly to stay ahead), where parents believe that without all-rounded competence (năng lực toàn diện – ability in both academic and extracurricular fields), their children might be left behind (bị tụt lại phía sau – to fail to keep up with others). My aunt Ly, for example, enrolls her son Michael in a variety of after-school classes, from piano to robotics, in a bid to shape him into a well-rounded prodigy (thần đồng toàn diện – a highly talented child in various areas), though this often leaves him exhausted and frustrated.>> tham khảo CẦN VIẾT & THU ÂM BAO NHIÊU BÀI ĐỂ ĐẠT 8.0 SPEAKING & 7.0 WRITING?

This trend, however, brings more harm than good to young individuals. Under constant pressure, children may suffer from chronic anxiety (lo âu kéo dài – long-term intense worry) and even fall into mental health crises (khủng hoảng sức khoẻ tinh thần – serious mental health issues). According to the WHO, one in five adolescents in Sri Lanka struggles with depression due to parental overexpectation (kỳ vọng quá mức của cha mẹ – unrealistically high expectations from parents). Furthermore, when children are taught to value only success, they develop a crippling fear of failure (nỗi sợ thất bại tê liệt – a paralyzing fear of making mistakes), which inhibits their personal growth. A child who is never allowed to fail will lack resilience (sự kiên cường – the ability to recover from setbacks) and adaptability (khả năng thích nghi – the skill to adjust to new conditions), both of which are indispensable for navigating the uncertain real-world landscape (môi trường thực tế đầy biến động – the unpredictable challenges of life).

In conclusion, while parental pressure may stem from good intentions, it is largely a negative development that can severely affect children’s mental well-being and long-term success.

✅ IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ:

The constant pressure to excel and fear of failure instilled by high-achieving parents can hinder a student's personal growth, limiting their ability to develop crucial skills like resilience and adaptability necessary for real-world success.

🔁 Synonyms & Antonyms

🧩 Complex Grammar Structures (with Vietnamese translation):

1. “Parents often equate their children's achievements with their own self-worth…”

   • Mệnh đề quan hệ với "with their own self-worth" (Parents coi thành tích con cái như giá trị bản thân của họ)

2. “By focusing solely on achievements, high-pressure parents have taught their kids to fear failure…”

   • Cấu trúc “By + V-ing…” chỉ nguyên nhân (do làm gì đó) → Bằng việc chỉ tập trung vào thành tích…

3. “Children who are never allowed to fail will lack resilience and adaptability…”

   • Mệnh đề quan hệ rút gọn: “Children who are never allowed”

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