Phân tích"Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

II. Kiến thức liên quan

IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Từ vựng topic "VIOLENCE & ARGUMENT"

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Dạng 2 question có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1 Why is this happening
    • Main idea 1: the prison system can make the situation worse when criminals put together in prison and they make friends with other offenders
      • Supporting idea: While they are locked up in prison, they do not have much to do there, and they would exchange information about what they have done before they came to the prison or they may plan crimes with other inmates. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Phân biệt "ago, for, before" tiếng anh
      • Example: Sometimes, some offenders encourage others to take revenge, which increases the crime
    • Main idea 2: a criminal record makes finding a job difficult as people usually avoid hiring ex-convict. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: offenders often do not have any other means of earning money)
      • Supporting idea: They are poor, uneducated and lacking skills needed to maintain a job. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: offenders are not given a chance to retrain and learn new skills for their future or develop a deeper understanding of correct moral behavior). >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "moral" tiếng anh
      • Example: 
  • Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2 what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?
    • Main idea 1: One method of dealing with criminals who reoffend is to have more supervision and checks in place when they are back in society (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: governments should focus on rehabilitation of criminals rather than punishment)
      • Supporting idea: Rather than being locked up in prison with other inmates, offenders can help society and become useful to their local community, and these activities would eliminate the negative influence that prisons can have. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ"INFLUENCE"tiếng anh
      • Example: 
    • Main idea 2: Another way to tackle this is to ensure that all criminals entering prison are given the chance to acquire useful skills which will hopefully ensure them a job after they have served their sentence. 
      • Supporting idea: By doing this, they can get integrated back into the society and also find some means to support themselves financially. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "society" tiếng anh
      • Example: 

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