Bên cạnh PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020"Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area have been introduced because of the increased crime. Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the drawbacks?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area have been introduced because of the increased crime. Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the drawbacks?

• Dạng outweigh thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé
• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (advantages>disadvantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao advantages>disadvantages
      • Main idea: Visible security measures such as increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces can deter criminal activities, making residents feel safer and potentially reducing crime rates.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • The presence of law enforcement officers and security personnel in public areas creates a sense of vigilance and raises the perceived risk of being caught in criminal acts. 
        • Criminals are less likely to commit offenses in areas where they believe they are being actively monitored.
      • Example: In New York City, a study by the Police Department found that crime rates decreased significantly after the city implemented a number of visible security measures, including increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces.
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao advantages>disadvantages
      • Main idea: When residents perceive their neighborhoods as safe, they are more likely to engage in community activities, local businesses thrive, and the overall quality of life improves.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Feeling safe encourages residents to participate in community activities, events, and local initiatives. 
        • They are more likely to attend neighborhood gatherings, join clubs, and collaborate on projects that enhance community cohesion.
      • Example: In the United States, a study by the University of Chicago found that residents of neighborhoods that were perceived as safe were more likely to participate in community activities, such as volunteering and attending neighborhood meetings.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Visible security measures such as increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces can deter criminal activities, making residents feel safer and potentially reducing crime rates.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • The presence of law enforcement officers and security personnel in public areas creates a sense of vigilance and raises the perceived risk of being caught in criminal acts. 
          • Criminals are less likely to commit offenses in areas where they believe they are being actively monitored.>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
        • Example: In New York City, a study by the Police Department found that crime rates decreased significantly after the city implemented a number of visible security measures, including increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces.
      • Main idea 2: When residents perceive their neighborhoods as safe, they are more likely to engage in community activities, local businesses thrive, and the overall quality of life improves.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Feeling safe encourages residents to participate in community activities, events, and local initiatives. 
          • They are more likely to attend neighborhood gatherings, join clubs, and collaborate on projects that enhance community cohesion.
        • Example: In the United States, a study by the University of Chicago found that residents of neighborhoods that were perceived as safe were more likely to participate in community activities, such as volunteering and attending neighborhood meetings.
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: Intensive surveillance measures, while aiming to enhance security, can infringe on individual privacy rights and contribute to feelings of surveillance and mistrust within communities.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Extensive surveillance can lead to the collection of vast amounts of personal information without individuals' consent or knowledge. >> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ SỬA BÀI IELTS WRITING TASK 2 ĐỀ THI THẬT NGÀY 22/8/2020 của HS IELTS TUTOR đạt 6.5 Writing
          • This infringes upon their right to privacy and raises concerns about how their data is being used and shared.
        • Example: In the United Kingdom, a study by the Surveillance Studies Centre found that residents of neighborhoods with high levels of surveillance felt less safe and more distrustful of their neighbors.
      • Main idea 2: Some security measures can disproportionately affect certain segments of the population, leading to feelings of discrimination and exclusion. 
        • Supporting idea: Security measures may be designed and implemented with biases that reflect societal stereotypes and prejudices, leading to unintended discrimination against certain racial, ethnic, or socioeconomic groups.
        • Example: For example, excessive policing in marginalized communities can worsen social divides.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

In recent years, an increasing number of security-enhancing (adj: improving the level of protection – tăng cường an ninh) initiatives have been implemented in urban areas as a response to rising crime rates. This trend, however, could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measures (phrase: having both advantages and disadvantages to the same extent – có lợi ích và bất lợi tương đương).

On the one hand, such measures bring undeniable advantages. Firstly, visible safety initiatives like surveillance cameras (n: electronic devices used to monitor areas – camera giám sát), increased police patrols, and well-lit streets can deter (v: discourage someone from doing something – ngăn cản) potential offenders and make citizens feel more secure. The constant presence of law enforcement officers (n: people responsible for maintaining public order – nhân viên thực thi pháp luật) enhances public vigilance and raises the perceived risk (n: level of danger people think exists – mức độ rủi ro được nhận thức) of being caught. For instance, in New York City, a Police Department report revealed a significant drop in crime after more visible policing (n: easily noticeable police presence – sự hiện diện dễ thấy của cảnh sát) and advanced surveillance systems were installed. Secondly, a safer environment encourages community engagement (n: active participation in local activities – sự tham gia của cộng đồng). When residents perceive their neighborhoods as secure, they tend to support local businesses, attend social events, and build stronger community ties, thereby improving overall quality of life (n: standard of health, comfort, and happiness – chất lượng cuộc sống).>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

On the other hand, several drawbacks accompany these measures. Excessive surveillance can infringe upon (v: violate or encroach on – xâm phạm) individuals’ privacy and foster a climate of mistrust (phrase: an atmosphere where people doubt each other – bầu không khí ngờ vực). The continuous monitoring of personal activities raises ethical questions regarding data misuse (n: the unethical use of personal data – việc sử dụng sai dữ liệu). Moreover, disproportionate policing in marginalized communities can deepen social divides (n: inequalities between groups in society – sự chia rẽ xã hội) and perpetuate feelings of discrimination (n: unfair treatment of certain groups – sự phân biệt đối xử).

In conclusion, while security measures can indeed enhance safety and community cohesion, they also pose significant concerns related to privacy and fairness; thus, their benefits and drawbacks appear to be evenly balanced.

🔹New Vocabulary & Explanations

1. security-enhancing (adj: improving protection – tăng cường an ninh)
   Synonyms: safety-improving, protection-boosting, defense-strengthening
   Antonyms: security-threatening, risk-inducing, danger-enhancing
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: security-enhancing initiatives have been implemented in urban areas.

2. positive and negative consequences in equal measures (phrase: có lợi ích và bất lợi tương đương)
   Synonyms: balanced effects, equal pros and cons, symmetrical outcomes
   Antonyms: one-sided impact, unbalanced result, uneven consequences
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: This trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measures.

3. surveillance cameras (n: camera giám sát)
   Synonyms: security cameras, CCTV systems, monitoring devices
   Antonyms: blind spots, unmonitored zones, unobserved areas
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Visible safety initiatives like surveillance cameras…

4. deter (v: ngăn cản)
   Synonyms: discourage, prevent, dissuade
   Antonyms: encourage, provoke, incite
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Visible safety initiatives can deter potential offenders.

5. law enforcement officers (n: nhân viên thực thi pháp luật)
   Synonyms: police officers, security personnel, constables
   Antonyms: criminals, offenders, perpetrators
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: The constant presence of law enforcement officers enhances public vigilance.

6. perceived risk (n: mức độ rủi ro được nhận thức)
   Synonyms: apparent danger, assumed threat, supposed hazard
   Antonyms: real safety, actual security, genuine protection
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Raises the perceived risk of being caught.

7. visible policing (n: sự hiện diện dễ thấy của cảnh sát)
   Synonyms: public policing, overt policing, open patrols
   Antonyms: covert surveillance, hidden patrol, undercover policing
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: After more visible policing and advanced surveillance systems were installed.

8. community engagement (n: sự tham gia của cộng đồng)
   Synonyms: public involvement, civic participation, local cooperation
   Antonyms: social detachment, community isolation, civic apathy
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: A safer environment encourages community engagement.

9. infringe upon (v: xâm phạm)
   Synonyms: violate, encroach on, trespass upon
   Antonyms: respect, uphold, protect
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Excessive surveillance can infringe upon individuals’ privacy.

10. a climate of mistrust (phrase: bầu không khí ngờ vực)
    Synonyms: atmosphere of suspicion, sense of distrust, environment of doubt
    Antonyms: climate of trust, atmosphere of confidence, sense of security
    IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Can foster a climate of mistrust.

🔹Difficult Grammar Structures

1. “This trend, however, could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measures.”
   → Mệnh đề xen giữa (however clause) để nhấn mạnh quan điểm tương phản.
   🇻🇳 Cấu trúc này giúp câu trang trọng và linh hoạt hơn: “Tuy nhiên, xu hướng này có thể mang lại cả mặt tích cực và tiêu cực ở mức tương đương.”

2. “When residents perceive their neighborhoods as secure, they tend to support local businesses…”
   → Câu điều kiện loại 1 mang nghĩa tổng quát (If/When + present, present).
   🇻🇳 Dùng để mô tả sự thật phổ quát: “Khi cư dân cảm thấy khu vực an toàn, họ thường ủng hộ các doanh nghiệp địa phương.”

3. “While security measures can indeed enhance safety and community cohesion, they also pose significant concerns…”
   → Cấu trúc “While + clause, clause” dùng để nhấn mạnh sự tương phản.
   🇻🇳 “Mặc dù các biện pháp an ninh có thể cải thiện sự an toàn, chúng cũng gây ra những lo ngại nghiêm trọng.”

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