Phân tích & sửa đề"Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?" IELTS WRITING TASK 1

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Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

II. Kiến thức liên quan

IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Từ vựng topic GAME trong IELTS

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
    • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
      • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
        • Main idea: Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng "because" & "because of" tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: This type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console.
        • Example: 
      • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
    • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
      • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
      • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
        • Main idea 1: video games are entertaining
          • Supporting idea: video games could help people in releasing their stress >> Players could feel the excitement of being a heroic character or a professional athlete. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "release" tiếng anh
          • Example: 
        • Main idea 2: some video games are considered as educative
          • Supporting idea: they are created to trigger people's imaginative thinking
          • Example: 
      • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
        • Main idea 1: Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Phân biệt CAN – COULD – BE ABLE (chỉ khả năng)
          • Supporting idea: This type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console.
          • Example: 
        • Main idea 2: some games have shown violence and sadistic scenes and affected to the gamers' mind
          • Supporting idea:
          • Example: 
      • Conclusion: paraphrase intro câu 2 

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