🔥Phân tích"Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education, and that government should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too. To what extent do you agree or disagree."IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education, and that government should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too. To what extent do you agree or disagree" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education, and that government should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:

Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE

• Main idea: Such activities benefit students academically & mentally.

• Supporting idea:
  Extracurricular activities in the arts teach students analytical skills and creative problem solving skills since they have to think creatively to successfully perform music, act in a play, or produce a work of art.
  👉 IELTS TUTOR giới thiệu Word form của từ "perform"

• Example:
  Activities such as athletics, music, theater, and organizations teach students how to discipline themselves through drills, practices, or rehearsals.

Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE

• Main idea: Life is stressful, and free time activities act as stress busters.

• Supporting idea:

  • They break the monotony of hectic day-to-day life.

  • They build community spirit among people, as during free time, people meet each other and socialize.
    👉 IELTS TUTOR gợi ý PHÂN BIỆT "ONE ANOTHER" & "EACH OTHER"

• Example:
  In Japan, there is a growing trend of people taking "forest bathing" breaks to relieve stress. Forest bathing is the practice of spending time in nature, specifically forests, to improve physical and mental health.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

Some argue that too much emphasis is placed on academic pursuits, and that governments should also allocate resources to recreational opportunities for the youth. I totally agree with this view, as leisure activities offer not only educational benefits but also emotional and social well-being.

Firstly, incorporating leisure-time activities into young people’s routines significantly enhances their academic and psychological development. Participation in extracurricular activities (hoạt động ngoại khóa – activities outside the standard curriculum) such as theater, music, or sports fosters analytical thinking (tư duy phân tích – the ability to examine information methodically) and creative problem-solving skills (kỹ năng giải quyết vấn đề một cách sáng tạo – finding solutions in innovative ways). These activities require students to collaborate in high-pressure environments (hợp tác trong môi trường áp lực cao), thereby enhancing their interpersonal abilities. For example, rigorous rehearsal schedules (lịch tập luyện nghiêm ngặt) in school plays or sports teams teach students self-discipline and time management, which are highly transferable to academic settings.

Secondly, today’s increasingly fast-paced world has made adolescence a particularly stressful life stage, and recreational activities serve as essential stress relievers (liệu pháp xả stress – activities that reduce stress). Leisure pursuits like hiking, dancing, or painting offer a much-needed respite from academic grind (sự nghỉ ngơi khỏi công việc học tập căng thẳng), helping young people achieve emotional equilibrium (sự cân bằng cảm xúc). In countries like Japan, many engage in “forest bathing” – a therapeutic activity proven to lower cortisol levels and improve mental clarity. Moreover, such community-based activities (hoạt động dựa vào cộng đồng) promote social cohesion (gắn kết xã hội), giving youth the chance to interact with like-minded peers (những người bạn có cùng sở thích), share experiences, and develop a sense of belonging.>> tham khảo CẦN VIẾT & THU ÂM BAO NHIÊU BÀI ĐỂ ĐẠT 8.0 SPEAKING & 7.0 WRITING?

In conclusion, allocating more public funding to youth leisure programs is not a distraction from education, but a vital complement to it, ensuring balanced growth and mental health.

🔍 New Vocabulary with Definitions (EN-VI)

1. Extracurricular activities – activities outside regular school subjects (hoạt động ngoại khóa)

2. Analytical thinking – ability to assess information systematically (tư duy phân tích)

3. Creative problem-solving skills – finding unique ways to solve problems (kỹ năng giải quyết vấn đề một cách sáng tạo)

4. Collaborate in high-pressure environments – work together under stress (hợp tác trong môi trường áp lực cao)

5. Rigorous rehearsal schedules – strict and intensive practice plans (lịch tập luyện nghiêm ngặt)

6. Self-discipline – control of one’s behavior (tự kỷ luật)

7. Stress relievers – something that reduces stress (liệu pháp xả stress)

8. Respite from academic grind – break from intense study (nghỉ ngơi khỏi công việc học tập căng thẳng)

9. Emotional equilibrium – emotional balance (sự cân bằng cảm xúc)

10. Community-based activities – activities involving local groups (hoạt động dựa vào cộng đồng)

11. Social cohesion – the bonds that bring society together (gắn kết xã hội)

12. Like-minded peers – friends with similar interests (những người bạn có cùng sở thích)

🔁 Synonyms & Antonyms (for stress relievers)

• Synonyms:
  stress busters, tension reducers, relaxation techniques

• Antonyms:
  stress inducers, triggers, pressure intensifiers

IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Recreational activities serve as essential stress relievers."

📚 Advanced Grammar Structures (Explained & Translated)

1. “Some argue that too much emphasis is placed on academic pursuits...”
   → Bị động với động từ tường thuật để đưa ra quan điểm chung
   → (Một số người cho rằng có quá nhiều sự chú trọng vào việc học hành...)

2. “...thereby enhancing their interpersonal abilities.”
   → Mệnh đề rút gọn bắt đầu bằng trạng từ "thereby" + V-ing để chỉ kết quả
   → (Qua đó nâng cao kỹ năng giao tiếp của họ.)

3. “...not a distraction from education, but a vital complement to it...”
   → Cấu trúc "not A but B" để nhấn mạnh đối lập
   → (Không phải là sự phân tâm khỏi việc học, mà là sự bổ trợ quan trọng cho nó.)

4. “such as theater, music, or sports fosters...”
   → Cấu trúc “such as + danh từ” để liệt kê ví dụ
   → (Ví dụ như sân khấu, âm nhạc hoặc thể thao thúc đẩy...)

Many argue that society places an excessive focus on formal education, suggesting that governments should also allocate resources to recreational pursuits for the youth. While I acknowledge the fundamental importance of education, I also agree that investing in leisure activities is equally essential for the holistic development of young people.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that academic achievement plays a pivotal role in shaping a young person’s future. In today’s highly competitive job market (thị trường việc làm cạnh tranh – competitive job market), educational qualifications are often prerequisites for employment and career advancement. Therefore, governments understandably prioritize funding for schools and universities to ensure that future generations are well-equipped with knowledge-based skills (kỹ năng dựa trên kiến thức – knowledge-based skills) required in modern economies. For example, in countries like South Korea and Germany, substantial government investment in education has resulted in a highly skilled workforce, which in turn attracts global companies seeking qualified professionals in engineering, IT, and other technical sectors.

On the other hand, I also agree that youth-oriented recreational programs (các chương trình giải trí hướng đến giới trẻ – youth-oriented recreational programs) can foster essential soft skills (kỹ năng mềm – soft skills) such as teamwork, communication, and creativity. For instance, government-sponsored sports clubs, music festivals, and art workshops not only serve as healthy outlets for stress but also nurture talent beyond the classroom (phát triển tài năng ngoài lớp học – nurture talent beyond the classroom). By striking a delicate balance (sự cân bằng tinh tế – delicate balance) between education and recreation, young people can grow into more well-rounded individuals (cá nhân toàn diện – well-rounded individuals) with a broader perspective on life.

In conclusion, while academic learning is essential, I believe that public investment in leisure programs is equally necessary to cultivate both the intellect and emotional well-being of young people.

📘 New Vocabulary with Definitions:

1. Competitive job market – thị trường việc làm cạnh tranh: a situation where many people compete for limited job opportunities

2. Knowledge-based skills – kỹ năng dựa trên kiến thức: abilities acquired through formal education and intellectual development

3. Excessive emphasis – nhấn mạnh quá mức: placing too much importance on something

4. Burnout – kiệt sức: a state of emotional, physical, and mental exhaustion

5. Youth-oriented recreational programs – các chương trình giải trí hướng đến giới trẻ: activities designed for the entertainment and growth of young people

6. Soft skills – kỹ năng mềm: interpersonal and emotional abilities like teamwork, communication, and leadership

7. Nurture talent beyond the classroom – phát triển tài năng ngoài lớp học: to help individuals grow in areas not taught in school

8. Delicate balance – sự cân bằng tinh tế: a careful and fair distribution of focus or resources

9. Well-rounded individuals – cá nhân toàn diện: people who are educated and emotionally/socially developed in multiple areas

✅ Examples of Vocabulary in Use:

• Excessive emphasis → "placing excessive emphasis on education can result in undue stress..."

• Well-rounded individuals → "young people can grow into more well-rounded individuals..."

🔁 Synonyms and Antonyms:

Excessive emphasis

• Synonyms: undue focus, over-prioritization, disproportionate attention

• Antonyms: balanced approach, moderate emphasis, equal distribution

Burnout

• Synonyms: exhaustion, fatigue, mental collapse

• Antonyms: vitality, energy, motivation

Well-rounded individuals

• Synonyms: versatile people, holistic learners, multi-skilled individuals

• Antonyms: narrow-minded people, one-dimensional learners, unbalanced individuals

🧠 Advanced Grammar Structures Used and Translation into Vietnamese:

1. While I acknowledge the fundamental importance of education, I partly agree that...
   ➤ Mặc dù tôi công nhận tầm quan trọng cơ bản của giáo dục, tôi phần nào đồng ý rằng...
   → [While + clause], [main clause] = Cấu trúc tương phản nâng cao.

2. Not only serve as healthy outlets for stress but also nurture talent beyond the classroom.
   ➤ Không chỉ là lối thoát lành mạnh khỏi căng thẳng mà còn nuôi dưỡng tài năng ngoài lớp học.
   → Not only... but also = Cấu trúc song song nâng cao với động từ chia chính xác.

3. By striking a delicate balance between education and recreation, young people can grow...
   ➤ Bằng cách đạt được sự cân bằng tinh tế giữa giáo dục và giải trí, người trẻ có thể phát triển...
   → By + V-ing, mệnh đề chính = Cấu trúc nguyên nhân – kết quả nâng cao.

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