🔥Phân tích"Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education, and that government should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too. To what extent do you agree or disagree."IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education, and that government should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too. To what extent do you agree or disagree" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

Some people feel that there is too much emphasis on getting an education, and that government should spend money on leisure time activities for young people too. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: Such activities benefit students academically & mentally.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Extracurricular activities in the arts teach students analytical skills and creative problem solving skills since they have to think creatively to successfully perform music, act in a play, or produce a work of art >> IELTS TUTOR giới thiệu Word form của từ "perform"
      • Example: 
        • Activities such as athletics, music, theater, and organizations teach students how to discipline themselves through drills, practices, or rehearsals.
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: life is stressful, and free time activities act as stress busters.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • They break the monotony of hectic day-to-day life.
        • They build community spirit among people as during free time people meet each other and socialize >> IELTS TUTOR gợi ý PHÂN BIỆT "ONE ANOTHER" & "EACH OTHER" 
      • Example: In Japan, there is a growing trend of people taking "forest bathing" breaks to relieve stress. Forest bathing is the practice of spending time in nature, specifically forests, to improve physical and mental health.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

Some argue that too much emphasis is placed on academic pursuits, and that governments should also allocate resources to recreational opportunities for the youth. I totally agree with this view, as leisure activities offer not only educational benefits but also emotional and social well-being.

Firstly, incorporating leisure-time activities into young people’s routines significantly enhances their academic and psychological development. Participation in extracurricular activities (hoạt động ngoại khóa – activities outside the standard curriculum) such as theater, music, or sports fosters analytical thinking (tư duy phân tích – the ability to examine information methodically) and creative problem-solving skills (kỹ năng giải quyết vấn đề một cách sáng tạo – finding solutions in innovative ways). These activities require students to collaborate in high-pressure environments (hợp tác trong môi trường áp lực cao), thereby enhancing their interpersonal abilities. For example, rigorous rehearsal schedules (lịch tập luyện nghiêm ngặt) in school plays or sports teams teach students self-discipline and time management, which are highly transferable to academic settings.

Secondly, today’s increasingly fast-paced world has made adolescence a particularly stressful life stage, and recreational activities serve as essential stress relievers (liệu pháp xả stress – activities that reduce stress). Leisure pursuits like hiking, dancing, or painting offer a much-needed respite from academic grind (sự nghỉ ngơi khỏi công việc học tập căng thẳng), helping young people achieve emotional equilibrium (sự cân bằng cảm xúc). In countries like Japan, many engage in “forest bathing” – a therapeutic activity proven to lower cortisol levels and improve mental clarity. Moreover, such community-based activities (hoạt động dựa vào cộng đồng) promote social cohesion (gắn kết xã hội), giving youth the chance to interact with like-minded peers (những người bạn có cùng sở thích), share experiences, and develop a sense of belonging.>> tham khảo CẦN VIẾT & THU ÂM BAO NHIÊU BÀI ĐỂ ĐẠT 8.0 SPEAKING & 7.0 WRITING?

In conclusion, allocating more public funding to youth leisure programs is not a distraction from education, but a vital complement to it, ensuring balanced growth and mental health.

🔍 New Vocabulary with Definitions (EN-VI)

1. Extracurricular activities – activities outside regular school subjects (hoạt động ngoại khóa)

2. Analytical thinking – ability to assess information systematically (tư duy phân tích)

3. Creative problem-solving skills – finding unique ways to solve problems (kỹ năng giải quyết vấn đề một cách sáng tạo)

4. Collaborate in high-pressure environments – work together under stress (hợp tác trong môi trường áp lực cao)

5. Rigorous rehearsal schedules – strict and intensive practice plans (lịch tập luyện nghiêm ngặt)

6. Self-discipline – control of one’s behavior (tự kỷ luật)

7. Stress relievers – something that reduces stress (liệu pháp xả stress)

8. Respite from academic grind – break from intense study (nghỉ ngơi khỏi công việc học tập căng thẳng)

9. Emotional equilibrium – emotional balance (sự cân bằng cảm xúc)

10. Community-based activities – activities involving local groups (hoạt động dựa vào cộng đồng)

11. Social cohesion – the bonds that bring society together (gắn kết xã hội)

12. Like-minded peers – friends with similar interests (những người bạn có cùng sở thích)

🔁 Synonyms & Antonyms (for stress relievers)

• Synonyms:
  stress busters, tension reducers, relaxation techniques

• Antonyms:
  stress inducers, triggers, pressure intensifiers

IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Recreational activities serve as essential stress relievers."

📚 Advanced Grammar Structures (Explained & Translated)

1. “Some argue that too much emphasis is placed on academic pursuits...”
   → Bị động với động từ tường thuật để đưa ra quan điểm chung
   → (Một số người cho rằng có quá nhiều sự chú trọng vào việc học hành...)

2. “...thereby enhancing their interpersonal abilities.”
   → Mệnh đề rút gọn bắt đầu bằng trạng từ "thereby" + V-ing để chỉ kết quả
   → (Qua đó nâng cao kỹ năng giao tiếp của họ.)

3. “...not a distraction from education, but a vital complement to it...”
   → Cấu trúc "not A but B" để nhấn mạnh đối lập
   → (Không phải là sự phân tâm khỏi việc học, mà là sự bổ trợ quan trọng cho nó.)

4. “such as theater, music, or sports fosters...”
   → Cấu trúc “such as + danh từ” để liệt kê ví dụ
   → (Ví dụ như sân khấu, âm nhạc hoặc thể thao thúc đẩy...)

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