Phân tích "Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion." IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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• Dạng discuss both views có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Viết về quan điểm Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.
    • Main idea:  if we exchange data, we can make faster progress in scientific research and teaching
      • Supporting idea: The basic rationale for this notion is that when more individuals have access to information, research or commercial solutions will improve owing to frequent feedback
      • Example: Academic progress is underpinned by the ability to peer-review new research and theories, and similarly, in scientific research, collaboration between different scientists is often essential in making new breakthroughs. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "between" tiếng anh 
  • Body 2: Viết về quan điểm Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. & nêu rõ mình ủng hộ quan điểm này 
    • Main idea 1: To remain ahead of the competition and avoid patent issues, firms keep information about corporate finances and the algorithm confidential. 
      • Supporting idea: Sharing this knowledge might cost the organization a lot of money and take away its competitive advantage. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "knowledge" tiếng anh
      • Example: It would be absurd for companies to share their financial accounts openly as this would make it easy for their rivals to compete unfairly.
    • Main idea 2: It is important to understand that sometimes new findings are often made at considerable expense in terms of time and money.
      • Supporting idea: There would be less incentive to develop intellectual property like new technologies and new drugs if they were instantly shared for everyone to duplicate.
      • Example: 

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

In today’s knowledge-driven (adj: based on or emphasizing the importance of knowledge – dựa trên tri thức) society, some argue that information should be freely shared in areas such as science, business, and education, while others contend that certain data must remain confidential. Although both perspectives have merit, I personally side with the latter view.

On the one hand, advocates of open information sharing claim that cross-disciplinary (adj: involving more than one area of study – liên ngành) cooperation can accelerate development. In fact, the basic rationale (n: a reason or explanation for something – lý do, cơ sở hợp lý) for this notion is that when more individuals have access to information, research and commercial solutions will improve owing to (prep: because of – do, nhờ vào) frequent feedback. For instance, in the academic world, peer review (compound noun: the evaluation of work by others in the same field – đánh giá của đồng nghiệp) plays a vital role in verifying research reliability. Similarly, in scientific research, cross-disciplinary collaboration (compound noun: cooperation between different fields – hợp tác liên ngành) between researchers has often led to groundbreaking (adj: very new and innovative – đột phá) discoveries. Therefore, open exchange of data cultivates innovation and the collective advancement (n: progress achieved by a group – tiến bộ chung) of society.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

On the other hand, others maintain that some information is too sensitive or valuable to be shared without restriction, and I agree with this view. Firstly, to remain ahead of the competition and avoid patent conflicts, firms keep their proprietary (adj: relating to ownership or exclusive rights – độc quyền) algorithms and financial data confidential. As a matter of fact, sharing such knowledge could cost the organization a substantial (adj: large in amount or importance – đáng kể) loss and destroy its competitive edge (n: an advantage over competitors – lợi thế cạnh tranh). For example, in 2018, Facebook’s proprietary (adj: relating to ownership or exclusive rights – độc quyền) user data algorithms were leaked, and this resulted in a massive substantial (adj: large in amount or importance – đáng kể) financial loss and reputational damage. Secondly, many technological breakthroughs (compound noun: significant advancements in technology – đột phá công nghệ) or scientific discoveries require substantial investment of time and money. Without protection, there would be little incentive (n: motivation to act – động lực) for researchers or companies to innovate. For example, in the political sphere, the U.S. government has long protected research conducted by the Department of Defense and private contractors such as Lockheed Martin or Raytheon, whose innovations in areas like cybersecurity and military intelligence are kept secret to prevent other nations from copying their technologies. Such protection not only safeguards national interests but also ensures continued funding for future innovation.

In conclusion, while the free circulation (n: unrestricted movement or sharing – sự lưu thông tự do) of information fosters cooperation, I firmly believe that safeguarding critical knowledge is essential for maintaining innovation and economic stability.

New Vocabulary List

1. knowledge-driven (adj: based on or emphasizing the importance of knowledge – dựa trên tri thức)
   Synonyms: information-based, data-oriented, intellect-centered
   Antonyms: ignorance-based, uninformed, uneducated
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: In today’s knowledge-driven society...

2. cross-disciplinary (adj: involving more than one area of study – liên ngành)
   Synonyms: interdisciplinary, multidisciplinary, integrative
   Antonyms: single-subject, isolated, narrow-focused
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: cross-disciplinary cooperation can accelerate development.

3. rationale (n: a reason or explanation for something – lý do, cơ sở hợp lý)
   Synonyms: justification, reasoning, logic
   Antonyms: irrationality, confusion, nonsense
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: The basic rationale for this notion is that...

4. owing to (prep: because of – do, nhờ vào)
   Synonyms: due to, on account of, thanks to
   Antonyms: despite, notwithstanding, regardless of
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: ...will improve owing to frequent feedback.

5. underpinned by (phr.v: supported or formed the basis for something – được củng cố bởi)
   Synonyms: supported by, sustained by, reinforced by
   Antonyms: weakened by, undermined by, eroded by
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Academic progress is underpinned by the ability to peer-review...

6. breakthroughs (n: important discoveries or developments – đột phá)
   Synonyms: advances, discoveries, innovations
   Antonyms: setbacks, regressions, failures
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: ...essential for making new breakthroughs.

7. collective advancement (n: progress achieved by a group – tiến bộ chung)
   Synonyms: joint progress, shared improvement, mutual development
   Antonyms: individual stagnation, isolation, decline>> IELTS TUTOR gợi ý tham khảo CẦN VIẾT & THU ÂM BAO NHIÊU BÀI ĐỂ ĐẠT 8.0 SPEAKING & 7.0 WRITING?
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: ...cultivates innovation and the collective advancement of society.

8. proprietary (adj: relating to ownership or exclusive rights – độc quyền)
   Synonyms: exclusive, private, patented
   Antonyms: public, shared, open-source
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Firms keep their proprietary algorithms confidential.

9. competitive edge (n: an advantage over competitors – lợi thế cạnh tranh)
   Synonyms: advantage, superiority, lead
   Antonyms: disadvantage, weakness, inferiority
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: ...and destroy its competitive edge.

10. free circulation (n: unrestricted movement or sharing – sự lưu thông tự do)
    Synonyms: open exchange, free flow, unrestricted distribution
    Antonyms: restriction, confinement, limitation
    IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: While the free circulation of information fosters cooperation...

Difficult Grammar Structures + Explanation

1. “Although both perspectives have merit, I personally side with the latter view.”
   → Complex sentence with concessive clause (Although…)
   Vietnamese: Mặc dù cả hai quan điểm đều có lý, tôi nghiêng về quan điểm thứ hai.

2. “The basic rationale for this notion is that when more individuals have access to information, research and commercial solutions will improve owing to frequent feedback.”
   → Complex conditional clause ("when more individuals have access…") + causative prepositional phrase ("owing to")
   Vietnamese: Lý do cơ bản cho quan điểm này là khi nhiều người có quyền truy cập thông tin, các nghiên cứu và giải pháp thương mại sẽ được cải thiện nhờ phản hồi thường xuyên.

3. “Without protection, there would be little incentive for individuals or companies to create new technologies or medicines if their intellectual property were instantly available for duplication.”
   → Second conditional sentence (unreal situation in the present)
   Vietnamese: Nếu không có sự bảo vệ, sẽ có rất ít động lực để các cá nhân hoặc công ty tạo ra công nghệ hoặc thuốc mới nếu tài sản trí tuệ của họ có sẵn ngay để sao chép.

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