Phân tích "Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic.

Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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• Dạng 2 question có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1 - DISAGREE 
    • Main idea 1: a person’s income will always be proportional to the amount of money they can generate>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn Cách dùng Figure / percentage / proportion IELTS 
      • Supporting idea:  
        • Music concerts and movies depend on the popularity of a few stars and again generate lots of money; that is why these people are paid more
        • Pop stars receive royalties from sales of their records or concert tickets
      • Example: 
    • Main idea 2: most pop stars have short-lived careers as pop music continues to evolve and new stars replace the old.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Most pop stars need to spend countless hours in the studio every year in order to record new music, followed by many weeks and months touring the world performing and promoting their music to their fans  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase từ "continue"(Diễn đạt "tiếp tục" tiếng anh)
        • Many pop stars become exhausted and burnout early in their career or turn to drugs and alcohol in order to cope with the stress
        • Sportspersons who are competing in high-level tournaments need to be in so superior a state if they intend to be financially successful, and these preparations require them to be in their juvenile period. 
        • They are likely compelled to give up their career in their early thirties, for they cannot maintain their competence after those vigorous years.
      • Example: Athletes, especially those who are doing high-impact sports, are undoubtedly more prone to crippling injuries, within or even beyond their active years, which means an untimely closure of their career, hence loss of income
  • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý thêm ideas khác:
    • Idea 1: Being famous, they have to hire bodyguards, live in more private neighborhoods, buy elegant designer apparels in order to attend official ceremonies, and even employ private tutors for their children because they might be kidnapped and ransomed in the public schools.>> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng & Paraphrase từ "privacy" tiếng anh 
    • Idea 2: since their salaries are far higher, a greater proportion of taxes are levied on their income, so it is usually, though not always, fair to assume they contribute more to their country’s economy
  • Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2 
    • Main idea 1: DOCTORS - the role of people who are working in the healthcare system and the educational institutes is rightly considered vital for society’s well-being
      • Supporting idea: 
        • While being in pain either physically or mentally, not only are we likely to fail to navigate our lives in a proper way, but also cannot enjoy any hobbies including whatever the sports and entertainment industry offers.
        • Doctors and deliver health care to the people, helping them to maintain good health with immediate and adequate care while teachers seed knowledge, social as well as moral values in children which is vital.
      • Example: 
    • Main idea 2: CEOS - they often work under an enormous amount of pressure. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: these positions come with a lot of responsibilities)
      • Supporting idea:
        • Top managers are the decision-makers who run the organization >> These managers, not the regular staff, are those who make the most important decisions in the company and are responsible for any failure resulting from their decisions.
        • They are always on the lookout for new ideas and implementing those ideas so that the company earns profits >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "company" tiếng anh 
        • They are even at the higher risk of getting fired if anything goes wrong.
        • Due to the significant role senior managers play in a company, and the stress they suffer as a result of this, being paid better salaries is more than justifiable.
      • Example: 
        • For example, the branch manager of a company is responsible for overseeing the operations of the entire branch, whereas a junior level employee only has to take care of their respective job. >> IELTS TUTOR gợi ý Phân biệt However/ Whereas
        • A customer care executive is only responsible for answering the queries of customers, and they are not held responsible if a product or service fails in the market. 
        • A production head, on the other hand, is answerable to the executives above him if a particular product fails. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng ON THE ONE HAND / ON THE OTHER HAND

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