Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Many criminals continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can we solve this problem?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.
I. Đề bài
Many criminals continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can we solve this problem?
II. Kiến thức liên quan
IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn:
III. Phân tích
IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:
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- Dạng 2 question có thể bố cục bài như sau:
- Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1
- Main idea 1: the prison system can make the situation worse when criminals put together in prison, and they make friends with other offenders (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Offenders mix with other criminals who can be a negative influence)
- Supporting idea: While they are locked up in prison, they do not have much to do there, and they would exchange information about what they have done before they came to the prison or they may plan crimes with other inmates. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Crime, a crime hay Crimes và cách dùng trong tiếng anh
- Example: A 2018 meta-analysis published in the journal "Criminology & Public Policy" by Laura DeLateur analyzed 60 studies on the impact of incarceration on recidivism. It found that spending time in prison is associated with a modestly higher chance of re-offending upon release.
- Main idea 2: offenders often do not have any other means of earning money (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: People who commit crimes often have no other way of making a living)
- Supporting idea:
- They are poor, uneducated and lacking skills needed to maintain a job.
- A criminal record makes finding a job difficult as people usually avoid hiring ex-convict. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn TỪ VỰNG & IDEAS TOPIC CRIME IELTS
- Example: A 2018 study published in the journal "Criminology & Public Policy" found a significant association between poverty and property crime. The study suggests that individuals with lower socioeconomic status are more likely to commit crimes, particularly property crimes, due to limited legitimate opportunities to meet their needs
- Supporting idea:
- Main idea 1: the prison system can make the situation worse when criminals put together in prison, and they make friends with other offenders (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Offenders mix with other criminals who can be a negative influence)
- Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2
- Main idea 1: Implement a system for classifying inmates based on their level of risk and the nature of their offenses.
- Supporting idea: Keep violent and non-violent offenders, as well as first-time and repeat offenders, separate to minimize negative influences.
- Example: The Federal Bureau of Prisons in the United States employs a classification system that segregates inmates into various security levels based on their likelihood of escape, propensity for violence, and disciplinary issues, taking into account the severity of their offenses. This approach ensures that violent offenders or those with a violent history are housed in higher security facilities with enhanced supervision, while non-violent offenders, particularly first-time offenders, are typically placed in lower security environments with greater access to rehabilitation programs and social interaction.
- Main idea 2: prisons need vocational training which makes inmates to prepare (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Prisons should provide education or vocational training)
- Supporting idea:
- They can learn practical skills such as computer programming, car maintenance and graphic design. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách paraphrase từ CRIME tiếng anh
- In this way, they can be hired for a position that requires this certain knowledge and skills.
- Example:
- Community service is another way to reform offenders.
- Rather than being locked up in prison with other inmates, offenders can help society and become useful to their local community, and these activities would eliminate the negative influence that prisons can have.
- Supporting idea:
- Main idea 1: Implement a system for classifying inmates based on their level of risk and the nature of their offenses.
- Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1
IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:
Despite being punished through imprisonment (imprisonment: the state of being confined in prison – sự giam cầm trong tù), many offenders continue to reoffend (reoffend: to commit crimes again – tái phạm) after their release. This issue stems from both systemic flaws (systemic flaws: fundamental problems in the system – lỗi hệ thống) in prison environments and socioeconomic challenges (socioeconomic challenges: difficulties relating to both economic and social factors – thách thức kinh tế-xã hội) faced by ex-convicts.
One major reason for this recurrence is that the prison environment often perpetuates criminal behavior (perpetuate: to make something continue – duy trì/duy trì hành vi xấu). Inmates are placed in close contact with other criminals, including repeat offenders (repeat offenders: individuals who commit crimes again – người tái phạm), leading to the exchange of illicit knowledge (illicit knowledge: illegal or morally wrong information – kiến thức phi pháp) or even the planning of future crimes. A 2018 meta-analysis by Laura DeLateur found that incarceration is associated with a modestly higher chance of reoffending. Additionally, many ex-offenders face bleak employment prospects (bleak employment prospects: little or no hope of finding a job – triển vọng việc làm ảm đạm), worsened by a lack of education, practical skills, and the stigma of a criminal record. These individuals may resort to crime as their only way to make a living.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR
To address this, governments should implement a risk-based classification system (risk-based classification system: a system that categorizes based on danger level – hệ thống phân loại theo mức độ rủi ro) to separate violent and non-violent criminals. This would reduce harmful interactions and allow targeted rehabilitation. Furthermore, prisons must provide comprehensive vocational training (comprehensive vocational training: full and inclusive job skill education – đào tạo nghề toàn diện) in fields such as car repair, coding, or digital design. These job-ready programs (job-ready programs: courses that prepare someone for employment – chương trình chuẩn bị sẵn sàng cho việc làm) can help inmates reintegrate into society. Community service should also be encouraged as it fosters social reintegration (social reintegration: re-entering society in a positive way – tái hòa nhập cộng đồng).
In conclusion, reducing recidivism requires a combination of effective inmate classification and access to meaningful rehabilitation programs.
✅ New Vocabulary & Definitions
Imprisonment – (English) being confined in prison | (Vietnamese) sự bỏ tù
Reoffend – (English) to commit a crime again | (Vietnamese) tái phạm
Systemic flaws – (English) fundamental issues within a system | (Vietnamese) những khiếm khuyết trong hệ thống
Socioeconomic challenges – (English) difficulties caused by both social and economic factors | (Vietnamese) thách thức kinh tế xã hội
Perpetuate – (English) to cause something to continue | (Vietnamese) duy trì (thường là điều tiêu cực)
Repeat offenders – (English) criminals who commit crimes repeatedly | (Vietnamese) người tái phạm
Illicit knowledge – (English) knowledge related to illegal activities | (Vietnamese) kiến thức phi pháp
Bleak employment prospects – (English) very poor chances of getting a job | (Vietnamese) triển vọng việc làm mờ mịt
Risk-based classification system – (English) system for grouping inmates by level of danger | (Vietnamese) hệ thống phân loại theo mức độ rủi ro
Comprehensive vocational training – (English) complete, all-encompassing job training | (Vietnamese) đào tạo nghề toàn diện
Job-ready programs – (English) training that prepares someone for work | (Vietnamese) chương trình sẵn sàng việc làm
Social reintegration – (English) re-entering society successfully | (Vietnamese) tái hòa nhập xã hội
🌟 IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ
“...the prison environment often perpetuates criminal behavior...”
“...many ex-offenders face bleak employment prospects...”
“...governments should implement a risk-based classification system...”
📌 Synonyms & Antonyms
| Word | Synonyms (italicized) | Antonyms (italicized) |
|---|---|---|
| Perpetuate | maintain, sustain, prolong | halt, discontinue, terminate |
| Bleak | grim, hopeless, discouraging | promising, bright, optimistic |
| Reoffend | relapse, repeat, recommit | reform, rehabilitate, desist |
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