Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to the society, so they should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to the society, so they should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY DISAGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
• Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY DISAGREE
  • Main idea: a person’s income will always be proportional to the amount of money they can generate>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn Cách dùng Figure / percentage / proportion IELTS 
  • Supporting idea:  
    • Music concerts and movies depend on the popularity of a few stars and again generate lots of money; that is why these people are paid more
    • Pop stars receive royalties from sales of their records or concert tickets
  • Example: In the music industry, numerous musicians play crucial roles in the success of concerts and albums, yet superstars like Beyoncé or Taylor Swift dominate profits due to their unparalleled popularity, which directly translates into substantial revenue. Their immense appeal becomes a driving force behind financial success in the industry.
     
• Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY DISAGREE
  • Main idea: most pop stars have short-lived careers as pop music continues to evolve and new stars replace the old.
    • Supporting idea: 
      • Most pop stars need to spend countless hours in the studio every year in order to record new music, followed by many weeks and months touring the world performing and promoting their music to their fans  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase từ "continue"(Diễn đạt "tiếp tục" tiếng anh)
      • Many pop stars become exhausted and burnout early in their career or turn to drugs and alcohol in order to cope with the stress
      • Sportspersons who are competing in high-level tournaments need to be in so superior a state if they intend to be financially successful, and these preparations require them to be in their juvenile period. 
      • They are likely compelled to give up their career in their early thirties, for they cannot maintain their competence after those vigorous years.
    • Example: Athletes, especially those who are doing high-impact sports, are undoubtedly more prone to crippling injuries, within or even beyond their active years, which means an untimely closure of their career, hence loss of income
• IELTS TUTOR gợi ý thêm ideas khác:
  • Idea 1: Being famous, they have to hire bodyguards, live in more private neighborhoods, buy elegant designer apparels in order to attend official ceremonies, and even employ private tutors for their children because they might be kidnapped and ransomed in the public schools.
  • Idea 2: since their salaries are far higher, a greater proportion of taxes are levied on their income, so it is usually, though not always, fair to assume they contribute more to their country’s economy.

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

It is often argued that highly-educated professionals (người có trình độ học vấn cao – people with advanced education) such as doctors and teachers should earn more than celebrities in sports and entertainment. However, I totally disagree with this idea because income is often based on economic impact rather than societal contribution.

First of all, a person’s earnings are typically tied to the revenue they can generate. Sports and entertainment industries are heavily profit-driven ecosystems (hệ sinh thái lợi nhuận cao – systems primarily focused on financial gain) that revolve around the fame and appeal of certain individuals. For example, in the music world, while numerous musicians contribute behind the scenes, megastars like Beyoncé or Taylor Swift command lucrative contracts (hợp đồng sinh lời – highly profitable agreements) because their massive fan base guarantees ticket sales, merchandise, and streaming income. Their magnetic public image (hình ảnh công chúng thu hút – strong appeal in public perception) becomes the key to success in a celebrity-centric economy (nền kinh tế xoay quanh người nổi tiếng – an economy where famous people influence profit generation), justifying their high income.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

Secondly, celebrity careers, though glamorous, are often precarious and physically demanding. Athletes, for instance, must endure rigorous training regimens (chế độ tập luyện nghiêm ngặt – strict fitness programs) from a young age, with careers that often end prematurely due to injuries or reduced physical performance. Similarly, singers and actors frequently face mental fatigue and burnout (kiệt sức tinh thần – extreme emotional and mental exhaustion) due to tight schedules and relentless public scrutiny. Despite these challenges, they continue to deliver content that resonates globally, thus remaining financially valuable. Their fleeting fame (danh tiếng ngắn ngủi – short-lived popularity) compels them to capitalize quickly on public attention before being replaced by newcomers in an ever-evolving industry.

In conclusion, although professionals contribute immensely to society, the market-driven nature of showbiz and sports explains why entertainers often command higher salaries.

New Vocabulary with English & Vietnamese Meanings (with examples):

1. Highly-educated professionals – people with advanced education (người có trình độ học vấn cao)
   → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “It is often argued that highly-educated professionals... deserve higher pay…”

2. Heavily profit-driven ecosystems – systems focused on making profit (hệ sinh thái lợi nhuận cao)
   → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "The sports and entertainment industries are heavily profit-driven ecosystems…”

3. Lucrative contracts – very profitable agreements (hợp đồng sinh lời)
   → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Beyoncé or Taylor Swift command lucrative contracts…”

4. Magnetic public image – appealing and charming reputation (hình ảnh công chúng thu hút)
   →IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Their magnetic public image is the backbone…”

5. Celebrity-centric economy – a system where celebrities generate revenue (nền kinh tế dựa vào người nổi tiếng)
   →IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “...in a celebrity-centric economy…”

6. Precarious and physically demanding – unstable and requiring physical effort (bấp bênh và đòi hỏi thể lực cao)
   → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “The careers of entertainers and athletes are often precarious and physically demanding…”

7. Rigorous training regimens – strict and tough training schedules (chế độ luyện tập nghiêm ngặt)
   →IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Athletes must endure rigorous training regimens…”

8. Mental fatigue and burnout – emotional exhaustion (kiệt sức tinh thần)
   → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “...constantly face mental fatigue and burnout…”

9. Fleeting fame – short-lived popularity (danh tiếng chóng tàn)
   → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Their fleeting fame pushes them to capitalize quickly…”

10. Capitalize quickly on public attention – take full advantage of fame (tận dụng sự nổi tiếng càng sớm càng tốt)
    →IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Capitalize quickly on public attention before they are replaced…”

11. Market-driven nature of showbiz and sports – entertainment ruled by profit (bản chất thị trường của ngành giải trí và thể thao)
    → IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “...the market-driven nature of showbiz and sports explains why…”

Synonyms and Antonyms:

• Lucrative
  Synonyms: profitable, rewarding, high-paying
  Antonyms: unprofitable, low-paying, disadvantageous
  IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Taylor Swift commands lucrative contracts…”

• Fleeting
  Synonyms: short-lived, temporary, passing
  Antonyms: lasting, enduring, long-term
  IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Their fleeting fame pushes them…”

• Rigorous
  Synonyms: intense, demanding, strict
  Antonyms: lenient, relaxed, easy
  IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Athletes must endure rigorous training regimens…”

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