🔥Phân tích"Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. Do you agree or disagree?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR) (Đề thi 11/8/2023) - Bài mẫu, kèm dịch & giải thích từ vựng & cấu trúc grammar khó

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. Do you agree or disagree?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. Do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: It aligns with public health concerns and promotes responsible consumer choices.
      • Supporting idea:  
        • Regular overconsumption of food and drink high in calories, sugar and fat can lead to weight gain and, over time, obesity, which in turn has a significant impact on health and wellbeing and increases the risk of obesity related diseases   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Từ vựng topic"Natural Resources"IELTS
        • By curbing the availability of unhealthy products, individuals might be less inclined to consume them, thus potentially reducing the prevalence of health issues like obesity, diabetes, and heart disease.
      • Example: 
        • A study published in the journal "Obesity" found that a 10% increase in the price of sugary drinks was associated with a 10% decrease in their consumption.
        • Another study, published in the journal "Health Affairs", found that a tax on sugary drinks in Mexico led to a 12% decrease in their consumption.
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: Force businesses not to produce unhealthy foods (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý có thể viết ý khác: not to market unhealthy food to consumers)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • The food industry plays a major role in the obesity epidemic
        • Responsible companies must commit to ending the flood of unhealthy food and support their customers to eat healthier by ensuring healthy choices are available, accessible and affordable for all.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Từ vựng & Ideas topic "Throwaway society" IELTS
      • Example: 
        • A study published in the journal "Nature" found that exposure to unhealthy food marketing is associated with increased consumption of unhealthy foods and weight gain.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

Some people argue that shops should be prohibited (English: forbidden; Vietnamese: bị cấm) from selling food and drinks that are scientifically proven (English: confirmed by scientific research; Vietnamese: được chứng minh bởi khoa học) to be detrimental to health. I totally agree with this opinion because such a move would not only protect public health but also push food producers toward more ethical practices.

Firstly, banning unhealthy food and beverages supports health-conscious (English: aware and concerned about one’s health; Vietnamese: quan tâm đến sức khỏe) consumption and aligns with nationwide health campaigns (English: large-scale efforts to improve public health; Vietnamese: chiến dịch sức khỏe toàn quốc). The overconsumption (English: the act of consuming too much; Vietnamese: tiêu thụ quá mức) of high-calorie, sugar-laden, and fat-rich products significantly contributes to obesity, diabetes, and cardiovascular diseases. By curbing the availability (English: limiting access; Vietnamese: hạn chế sự sẵn có) of these health-impairing items (English: products that damage health; Vietnamese: các mặt hàng gây hại cho sức khỏe), consumers would be less likely to purchase them. For instance, a study published in Obesity revealed that a 10% price hike on sugary drinks led to an equal reduction in their consumption, suggesting that even minor interventions can have a meaningful impact.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

Secondly, holding businesses accountable (English: making companies take responsibility; Vietnamese: khiến các doanh nghiệp chịu trách nhiệm) for the quality of their products is a vital step toward public well-being. Many food companies rely heavily on aggressive marketing (English: forceful promotion; Vietnamese: tiếp thị mạnh mẽ) of unhealthy goods to maximize profits. However, a study in Nature found a direct correlation between exposure to junk food advertisements and increased consumption among children. If such profit-driven enterprises (English: businesses motivated by profit; Vietnamese: doanh nghiệp vì lợi nhuận) are restricted from promoting and selling harmful items, they may shift toward healthier alternatives that benefit both the company and its customers.

In conclusion, banning the sale of scientifically unhealthy food and drink would be a health-driven, socially responsible policy that could improve long-term public well-being.

✅ 3 Synonyms & 3 Antonyms (with examples from essay)

• Prohibited

  • Synonyms: forbidden, banned, restricted

  • Antonyms: allowed, permitted, authorized

  • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Some people argue that shops should be prohibited from selling…”

• Overconsumption

  • Synonyms: excess, overindulgence, surplus intake

  • Antonyms: moderation, limitation, restriction

  • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “The overconsumption of sugar-laden products…”

• Aggressive marketing

  • Synonyms: forceful advertising, hard selling, pushy promotion

  • Antonyms: subtle marketing, soft selling, minimal advertising

  • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: “Many companies rely heavily on aggressive marketing…”

✅ Difficult Grammar Structures (Explained & Translated)

1. IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ Such a move would not only protect public health but also push food producers toward more ethical practices.

   • Grammar Point: "Not only... but also" inversion structure

   • Translation: Một hành động như vậy không những bảo vệ sức khỏe cộng đồng mà còn thúc đẩy các nhà sản xuất thực phẩm hướng đến các hành động đạo đức hơn.

2. IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ If such profit-driven enterprises are restricted..., they may shift toward healthier alternatives.

   • Grammar Point: First conditional sentence with modal verb "may"

   • Translation: Nếu các doanh nghiệp vì lợi nhuận như vậy bị hạn chế..., họ có thể chuyển sang các lựa chọn lành mạnh hơn.

3. IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụA study revealed that a 10% price hike... led to an equal reduction in their consumption.

   • Grammar Point: Complex sentence with noun clause as object

   • Translation: Một nghiên cứu tiết lộ rằng việc tăng giá 10%... dẫn đến mức tiêu thụ giảm tương ứng.

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