Phân tích"People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm sửa bài HS IELTS TUTOR)

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Bên cạnh HƯỚNG DẪN TỪNG BƯỚC CÁCH LÀM BÀI TẬP MẪU IELTS READING DẠNG FILL IN THE GAP, IELTS TUTOR cung cấp thêm Phân tích & Sửa bài essay về "spending less time with their family" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?

II. Từ vựng

IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Từ vựng Topic Family IELTS

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Dạng bài này thuộc dạng 2 question essay là dạng rất đỗi quen thuộc đối với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR 
  • Dạng bài này sẽ phân chia bố cục 2 đoạn thân bài như sau:
    • Body 1: viết về causes (nên chọn ra 2 causes)
          • Main idea 1: technologies separates family members and deter them from connecting with each other in a meaningful way.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase "prevent" tiếng anh
            • Supporting idea:  Some people think that they are with their children, but the fact is that they just stay in one place with their children while different people do different things in the same house
            • Example: if family members become too immersed in using their devices for individual recreational purposes, like checking their social media accounts or browsing their favourite websites, they may neglect their relationships with other family members. 
          • Main idea 2: time with their children or parents or spouses is so scarce (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: The amount of quality time that a family spends together is likely to reduce, negatively impacting family relations)
            • Supporting idea: With the fast pace of life combined with mounting pressure, people are always busy   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase "busy" tiếng anh
            • Example: 
    • Body 2: viết về effects (nên chọn 2 effects)
            • Main idea 1: An individual may experience emotional distress if they do not receive proper support from his/ her immediate family.
              • Supporting idea: This is because it is believed that family is where people can share their feelings and problems, which help them to release their stress.    >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Từ vựng topic "Family history" IELTS
              • Example: Young children who do not have time with their siblings or parents are often more vulnerable to social pressures, such as bullying, because they do not receive enough affection and encouragement from their family. In reality, those children may grow up with low self-esteem and sometimes depression.
            • Main idea 2: The bonds between parents and children may be weakened, which usually leads to conflicts and unhappiness.
              • Supporting idea: Family relationships will greatly suffer because it will become more difficult to bridge the generation gap between parents and children without family bonding time.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Từ vựng topic Family (child education, child birth...) IELTS
              • Example: For instance, when parents do not spend much time with their children, their children will lack of appropriate parental care and attention and are likely to follow a path towards criminal behaviors.

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