Phân tích "Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion." IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion." IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

I. Đề bài

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

II. Kiến thức liên quan

III. Phân tích

  • Dạng discuss both views thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé
  • Dạng discuss both views có thể bố cục bài như sau:
    • Body 1: Viết về quan điểm others think it is unfair
      • Main idea: There are other professions such as teaching and medicine which are even more important than sports.
        • Supporting idea: The amount of money one makes should be equivalent to the value of service one provides to the society. >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn Cách paraphrase từ "important" (diễn đạt "quan trọng" tiếng anh)
        • Example: 
          • Teachers play an important role in imparting knowledge and shaping the character and personality of children. 
          • Similarly, doctors work tirelessly to save precious lives.
    • Body 2: Viết về quan điểm this is fully justified & nêu rõ mình ủng hộ quan điểm này 
      • Main idea 1: a person’s income will always be proportional to the amount of money they can generate>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn Cách dùng Figure / percentage / proportion IELTS 
        • Supporting idea:  
          • Music concerts and movies depend on the popularity of a few stars and again generate lots of money; that is why these people are paid more
          • Pop stars receive royalties from sales of their records or concert tickets
        • Example: 
      • Main idea 2: most pop stars have short-lived careers as pop music continues to evolve and new stars replace the old.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Most pop stars need to spend countless hours in the studio every year in order to record new music, followed by many weeks and months touring the world performing and promoting their music to their fans  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase từ "continue"(Diễn đạt "tiếp tục" tiếng anh)
          • Many pop stars become exhausted and burnout early in their career or turn to drugs and alcohol in order to cope with the stress
          • Sportspersons who are competing in high-level tournaments need to be in so superior a state if they intend to be financially successful, and these preparations require them to be in their juvenile period. 
          • They are likely compelled to give up their career in their early thirties, for they cannot maintain their competence after those vigorous years.
        • Example: Athletes, especially those who are doing high-impact sports, are undoubtedly more prone to crippling injuries, within or even beyond their active years, which means an untimely closure of their career, hence loss of income
    • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý thêm ideas khác:
      • Idea 1: Being famous, they have to hire bodyguards, live in more private neighborhoods, buy elegant designer apparels in order to attend official ceremonies, and even employ private tutors for their children because they might be kidnapped and ransomed in the public schools.>> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng & Paraphrase từ "privacy" tiếng anh 
      • Idea 2: since their salaries are far higher, a greater proportion of taxes are levied on their income, so it is usually, though not always, fair to assume they contribute more to their country’s economy

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Các khóa học IELTS online 1 kèm 1 - 100% cam kết đạt target 6.0 - 7.0 - 8.0