Phân tích essay"Today, many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on sports. Why? Is it a positive or a negative development?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

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Bên cạnh phân tích đề thi thật task 1 viết thư của IELTS GENERAL được sửa rất kĩ bởi giáo viên cho bạn học sinh đã đi thi ngày đó và đạt 6.0 nhé, IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích bài essay Today, many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on sports. Why? Is it a positive or a negative development? IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

Today, many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on sports. Why? Is it a positive or a negative development?

II. Từ vựng

Từ vựng topic Computer Games mà IELTS TUTOR đã hướng dẫn

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Dạng này là dạng 2 question, nên sẽ chia bố cục bài văn như sau:
    • Body 1: viết trả lời câu hỏi Why
      • Main idea 1:  the sedentary lifestyle favoured by a large number of children, especially those living in big cities  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: As computerized games growth, children develop their sedentary lifestyle correspondingly) >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Từ vựng topic GAME trong IELTS 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Compared to sports, computer games are less physically demanding, and therefore draw much more attention from these lazy, inactive children.
          • The fact that children are familiar with long sitting erects a psychological barrier to outdoor physical activities.  
        • Example: 
      • Main idea 2: parents do not bother about the screen time because they will not be disturbed as long as their children are hooked to the machine.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Young people develop addiction to computers and do not favour playing sports. 
          • They feel outdoor activities are tiring and require enormous physical efforts. >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Từ Vựng IELTS Topic TECHNOLOGY
        • Example: 
    • Body 2: viết trả lời câu hỏi Is it a positive or a negative development? Trong đó body 2 nếu IELTS TUTOR Theo quan điểm là negative thì sẽ nêu ra 1 hoặc 2 lí do vì sao lại là negative 
      • Main idea 1: using a computer for a long time affects directly on eyes of children and their physical growth  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: This habit has harmful effects on their mental and physical health)
        • Supporting idea:
          • This will increase many health issues and will strain our future generations.
          • Prolonged screen exposure will cause vision related issues alongside obesity because it does not involve any body movements.
        • Example: For example, children who allocate a substantial part of their time for video games are more likely to contract cardiovascular and osteoarthritis diseases. >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn   PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
      • Main idea 2: if they do not play outside sports, it will turn them into introverts who lack adequate communication skills.  
        • Supporting idea: When children spend long hours on the computer, they become isolated from the society/their peers
        • Example: 
  • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý các ý khác:

    • Main idea: The majority of games on electronic devices are violent rather than educational

    • Supporting idea: This means excessive exposure to those game plots builds up children’s mental impairment and tendency towards anti-social behaviors, contributing to higher crime rate in the future.

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