Phân tích "In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi 20/8/2022 (computer-based) & 2/12/2023)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi 20/8/2022 (computer-based)).

In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng outweigh thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: access to green space is essential for human happiness, and this is especially important in crowded cities >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng "HUMAN" & "HUMANS" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Parks offer people an escape from crowds and traffic which is beneficial to individuals’ health as well as to the well-being of a community.
        • Most modern cities are congested and people living in these urban places consider open spaces and parks as a second home. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "CONSIDER" tiếng anh 
        • While children utilize this spaces for play, older adults relax in these places. 
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: providing a place for people to relax, local parks can be used to generate revenue in several ways. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "generate" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting idea:
        • Parks provide open spaces suitable for hosting events such as concerts, festivals, and sports competitions, attracting visitors and generating revenue from ticket sales and concessions
        • Parks can offer recreational programs, fitness classes, or sports leagues, charging participants a fee to join. These programs not only contribute to revenue but also promote community engagement.
      • Example: 
        • Cities can use their parks to sponsor events such as art fairs and music festivals and allow local shops and restaurants to sell their goods during the events.
        • City governments could also establish community gardens in their parks and rent individual plots to local residents. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "local" tiếng anh 
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures) >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng tính từ "negative" tiếng anh 
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Encouraging local food production reduces the carbon footprint associated with transporting produce, contributing to environmental sustainability.
        • Supporting idea: Local food production typically involves shorter transportation distances from farm to consumer, reducing the fuel consumption and emissions associated with long-haul transportation.
        • Example: In the heart of Finger Lakes country, Ithaca, New York, embodies the locavore movement with champions like Purity Organics Farm—a family-run operation that cultivates a diverse array of produce, fostering sustainability by supplying directly to local restaurants and farmers markets. 
      • Main idea 2: Access to fresh, locally grown produce can improve community members' nutrition and overall health. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Locally grown produce is often harvested at its peak ripeness, ensuring optimal nutrient content. 
          • This translates to a higher concentration of vitamins, minerals, and antioxidants, contributing to better overall health.
        • Example: 

          Look no further than the Growing Power initiative in Chicago, Illinois, a non-profit empowering low-income communities through urban farming, exemplified by Bronzeville Green City Farm, offering residents access to a vibrant array of fresh vegetables, fruits, and herbs.

    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: access to green space is essential for human happiness, and this is especially important in crowded cities.
        • Supporting idea: Parks offer people an escape from crowds and traffic which is beneficial to individuals’ health as well as to the well-being of a community.
      • Main idea 2: providing a place for people to relax, local parks can be used to generate revenue in several ways. >> IELTS TUTOR gợi ý Paraphrase "RELAX" tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Parks provide open spaces suitable for hosting events such as concerts, festivals, and sports competitions, attracting visitors and generating revenue from ticket sales and concessions
          • Parks can offer recreational programs, fitness classes, or sports leagues, charging participants a fee to join. These programs not only contribute to revenue but also promote community engagement.
        • Example: 
          • Cities can use their parks to sponsor events such as art fairs and music festivals and allow local shops and restaurants to sell their goods during the events.
          • City governments could also establish community gardens in their parks and rent individual plots to local residents. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "establish"

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