Phân tích "In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi 20/8/2022 (computer-based) & 2/12/2023)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi 20/8/2022 (computer-based)).

In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng outweigh thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: access to green space is essential for human happiness, and this is especially important in crowded cities >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng "HUMAN" & "HUMANS" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Parks offer people an escape from crowds and traffic which is beneficial to individuals’ health as well as to the well-being of a community.
        • Most modern cities are congested and people living in these urban places consider open spaces and parks as a second home. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "CONSIDER" tiếng anh 
        • While children utilize this spaces for play, older adults relax in these places. 
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: providing a place for people to relax, local parks can be used to generate revenue in several ways. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "generate" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting idea:
        • Parks provide open spaces suitable for hosting events such as concerts, festivals, and sports competitions, attracting visitors and generating revenue from ticket sales and concessions
        • Parks can offer recreational programs, fitness classes, or sports leagues, charging participants a fee to join. These programs not only contribute to revenue but also promote community engagement.
      • Example: 
        • Cities can use their parks to sponsor events such as art fairs and music festivals and allow local shops and restaurants to sell their goods during the events.
        • City governments could also establish community gardens in their parks and rent individual plots to local residents. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "local" tiếng anh 
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures) >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng tính từ "negative" tiếng anh 
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Encouraging local food production reduces the carbon footprint associated with transporting produce, contributing to environmental sustainability.
        • Supporting idea: Local food production typically involves shorter transportation distances from farm to consumer, reducing the fuel consumption and emissions associated with long-haul transportation.
        • Example: In the heart of Finger Lakes country, Ithaca, New York, embodies the locavore movement with champions like Purity Organics Farm—a family-run operation that cultivates a diverse array of produce, fostering sustainability by supplying directly to local restaurants and farmers markets. 
      • Main idea 2: Access to fresh, locally grown produce can improve community members' nutrition and overall health. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Locally grown produce is often harvested at its peak ripeness, ensuring optimal nutrient content. 
          • This translates to a higher concentration of vitamins, minerals, and antioxidants, contributing to better overall health.
        • Example: 

          Look no further than the Growing Power initiative in Chicago, Illinois, a non-profit empowering low-income communities through urban farming, exemplified by Bronzeville Green City Farm, offering residents access to a vibrant array of fresh vegetables, fruits, and herbs.

    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: access to green space is essential for human happiness, and this is especially important in crowded cities.
        • Supporting idea: Parks offer people an escape from crowds and traffic which is beneficial to individuals’ health as well as to the well-being of a community.
      • Main idea 2: providing a place for people to relax, local parks can be used to generate revenue in several ways. >> IELTS TUTOR gợi ý Paraphrase "RELAX" tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Parks provide open spaces suitable for hosting events such as concerts, festivals, and sports competitions, attracting visitors and generating revenue from ticket sales and concessions
          • Parks can offer recreational programs, fitness classes, or sports leagues, charging participants a fee to join. These programs not only contribute to revenue but also promote community engagement.
        • Example: 
          • Cities can use their parks to sponsor events such as art fairs and music festivals and allow local shops and restaurants to sell their goods during the events.
          • City governments could also establish community gardens in their parks and rent individual plots to local residents. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "establish"

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

In some urban areas, public parks are being converted into communal gardens where citizens can cultivate fruits and vegetables. While this transformation offers certain environmental and health-related benefits, I believe that the drawbacks significantly outweigh (vượt xa – outweigh – to be more significant than) the advantages.

First and foremost, access to green space (khả năng tiếp cận không gian xanh – access to green space – the ability to use open natural areas) plays a vital role in maintaining mental and physical well-being, especially in overcrowded urban settings (môi trường đô thị đông đúc – overcrowded urban settings – places in cities with high population density). Parks serve as urban sanctuaries (nơi trú ẩn đô thị – urban sanctuaries – peaceful places in cities) offering residents an escape from the hustle and bustle (sự ồn ào, náo nhiệt – hustle and bustle – busy and noisy activity) of city life. Children use these spaces for recreation, while elderly citizens enjoy them as peaceful environments to relax. Eliminating such areas may deprive (tước đoạt – deprive – to take something away from someone) the public of vital social and psychological benefits.>> tham khảo CẦN VIẾT & THU ÂM BAO NHIÊU BÀI ĐỂ ĐẠT 8.0 SPEAKING & 7.0 WRITING?

Secondly, beyond recreation, public parks serve as multi-functional venues (địa điểm đa chức năng – multi-functional venues – places used for various purposes) that can be utilized to generate revenue and foster social cohesion. These open spaces are ideal for hosting concerts, art festivals, and sporting events that draw crowds and stimulate the local economy through ticket sales (doanh thu vé – ticket sales – money earned from selling tickets) and food concessions. For instance, cities often allow small businesses to sell their products during events, thereby supporting the local economy. Additionally, while community gardens could be established, these could exist alongside parks without entirely repurposing (chuyển đổi hoàn toàn – entirely repurposing – changing the whole function of something) the land and limiting other uses.

In conclusion, although transforming parks into gardens can promote urban farming, the irreplaceable role (vai trò không thể thay thế – irreplaceable role – a function that nothing else can fulfil) that public green spaces play in enhancing well-being and supporting communities suggests that the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its merits.

✅ New Vocabulary with Explanation

1. Outweigh (vượt xa – to be more significant than)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: The disadvantages of converting parks into gardens outweigh the benefits.

2. Access to green space (khả năng tiếp cận không gian xanh – the ability to use open natural areas)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Access to green space plays a vital role in maintaining mental and physical well-being.

3. Overcrowded urban settings (môi trường đô thị đông đúc – places in cities with high population density)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Especially in overcrowded urban settings, people need space to unwind.

4. Urban sanctuaries (nơi trú ẩn đô thị – peaceful places in cities)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Parks serve as urban sanctuaries from the pressures of modern life.

5. Hustle and bustle (sự ồn ào, náo nhiệt – busy and noisy activity)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: They offer an escape from the hustle and bustle of daily life.

6. Deprive (tước đoạt – to take something away from someone)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Removing parks may deprive people of vital recreational spaces.

7. Multi-functional venues (địa điểm đa chức năng – places used for various purposes)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Public parks are multi-functional venues that can be monetized.

8. Ticket sales (doanh thu vé – money earned from selling tickets)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Events in parks generate income through ticket sales.

9. Entirely repurposing (chuyển đổi hoàn toàn – changing the whole function of something)

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Community gardens should not mean entirely repurposing parks.

10. Irreplaceable role (vai trò không thể thay thế – a function that nothing else can fulfil)

• IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Parks play an irreplaceable role in community well-being.

✅ Synonyms & Antonyms for Each Vocabulary Word (3 each)

✅ Difficult Grammar Structures & Examples

1. Relative clause with reduced participle

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Parks offering residents an escape from city life are vital for mental well-being.
     👉 Các công viên mang lại cho cư dân sự thoát khỏi cuộc sống đô thị là rất quan trọng cho sức khỏe tinh thần.

2. Inversion with negative adverbial

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Not only do these parks benefit individuals, but they also support the local economy.
     👉 Không chỉ những công viên này mang lại lợi ích cho cá nhân, mà còn hỗ trợ nền kinh tế địa phương.

3. Conditional sentence

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: If parks are removed, citizens may be deprived of essential open spaces.
     👉 Nếu các công viên bị loại bỏ, cư dân có thể bị tước đoạt không gian mở thiết yếu.

4. Complex noun phrases

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: A trend toward entirely repurposing multi-functional urban spaces into gardens...
     👉 Xu hướng chuyển đổi hoàn toàn các không gian đô thị đa chức năng thành vườn...

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