Phân tích "Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR)

· Task 2,Đề thi IELTS thật

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?

II. Kiến thức liên quan

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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  • Dạng 2 question có thể bố cục bài như sau:
    • Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1 
      • Main idea 1: This will obviously pose more challenges for the young who are struggling to find a place in the labour market.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ"pose"tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: Older people, understandably, are usually given more favourable consideration by recruiters due to their vast experience in comparison with the young generation, which can lead to a shortage of work for younger people, increasing the rates of unemployment.
        • Example: 
      • Main idea 2: when being unemployed and lacking a stable source of income, people are likely to commit crimes such as robbery to feed themselves and their family. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Because of joblessness, youngsters often lack money, and thus they may misbehave, such as spoiling, killing, etc. to live from day to day.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  TỪ & NGỮ NÊN BIẾT IELTS WRITING
          • Not only will the citizens’ quality of life diminish, but their safety will also be threatened  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: not only does our society indirectly incite crime in youths, but we also do not effectively exploit young workers who seem to be non-experienced but dedicated to working)
        • Example: 
    • Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2 
      • Main idea 1: employers should also create more job opportunities for young employees
        • Supporting idea:
        • Example: Take, for example, a fast-track scheme, a system for rapid training and job promotion of talented young staff. In this way, they can develop their potential to the fullest and make significant contributions to the company they are working for.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase từ "CRIME" tiếng anh
      • Main idea 2: New policies should be established in order to provide old people with sufficient social benefits, old-age pensions and medical care included, so that they can live comfortably when they retire
        • Supporting idea: This will reduce the level of competition for the same jobs between the young and the old and empower young people to increase their chances of getting their wanted positions.
        • Example: 

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