Phân tích & sửa essay"The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today"

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Bên cạnh Hướng dẫn đề thi IELTS 21/11/2020 bài WRITING TASK 1 (map) về school library (kèm bài sửa cho HS đi thi), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích & sửa essay"The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today"

I. Đề bài

Phân tích & sửa essay"The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today"

II. Kiến thức liên quan

III. Phân tích

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Intro: 
    • The given maps illustrate the transformations taking place in a beachfront area during the time period from 1950 and the present day hoặc 
    • The diagrams depict modifications to an unspecified beachfront area in Australia hoặc 
    • The map details a 1950 Australian beachfront location and alterations in the present day
  • Overall: 
    • Overall, the area has witnessed dramatic changes with the improvement of some facilities and the upgrading of transportation system hoặc 
    • Overall, there has been an increase in leisure facilities and motor vehicle access to the beach. However, the beach itself is unchanged.
  • Dạng map thông thường nên mỗi map một đoạn thân bài:
    • Body 1:
      • The front beach was located to the east of the city center. 
      • At the end of the road, there was a car park. 
      • In front of the beach, we could see a pavilion, four dining tables and a playground. 
      • Two 25 meter-pools were situated at the northeast and northwest corners of the beach while the light house could be seen towards the south east of the beach.
    • Body 2: 
      • The area has observed innovations with the extension of the main road to help tourists connect to the light house. 
      • The car park was renovated by a new one with larger space while the places of the playground and the tables were replaced by a new small parking space to meet the increasing demand of the local tourism. 
      • The introduction of two surf clubs next to the pools with the one on the left made bigger in size reaching 25 meters, together with a restaurant

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