Phân tích "Some people believe that the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers instead of benefitting them individually. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Thi máy 16/4/2022 & 19/11/2023)

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I. Đề bài

Some people believe that the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers instead of benefitting them individually. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

II. Kiến thức liên quan

III. Phân tích

1. Cách viết TOTALLY AGREE

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

  • Dạng opinion essay thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
  • Ở đề này, cần phải đọc thật kĩ đề sẽ thấy có sự gợi ý luôn ở trong đề bài về cách chia 2 đoạn thân bài, đó là:
    • Giả sử IELTS TUTOR hoàn toàn đồng ý với quan điểm đề cho thì nếu để ý kĩ 2 keywords là citizens & workers thì 2 đoạn thân bài sẽ được chia như sau:
      • Body 1: lí do thứ 1 vì sao totally agree với quan điểm đề cho Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals (viết về citizens) 
      • Body 2: lí do thứ 2 vì sao totally agree với quan điểm đề cho Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals (viết về workers)
  • Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
      • Main idea: In order to build a nation where people will help each other instead of turning into money-making machines, we should focus on our education system, especially what we teach our children.
        • Supporting idea:
          • The main purpose of education is to build up an enlightened nation where morality, honesty and integrity would be the key characteristics >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "purpose" tiếng anh
          • They would keep aside their personal ambitions, and work together for the betterment of the country.
        • Example: if talented and experienced doctors treat patients only for the money, healthcare for all would be a distant dream >> IELTS TUTOR tổng hợp Từ vựng topic Health / Health care / Medicine IELTS
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
      • Main idea: States spend a lot of tax money to keep the schools and their education system running, schools’ chief objective should be to focus on nurturing morality and good human characteristics among the students while also preparing them for their careers that would benefit society >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "society" tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: if schools plan to adopt an education system where teachers’ sole purpose would be to teach children how to be personally benefitted from jobs or businesses, the whole education system would collapse.
        • Example: Finland's education system, renowned for its emphasis on nurturing morality and holistic development alongside academic preparation, stands out for fostering collaboration, critical thinking, and moral values. Teachers play a key role in cultivating a love for learning, ethical behavior, and societal responsibility, contributing to Finland's reputation for an effective and well-rounded education system.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

The primary aim of education should be to mold students into responsible citizens and competent workers rather than merely focusing on individual benefits. I completely agree with this viewpoint, as prioritizing the development of good citizens and workers ensures societal well-being and national progress.

Firstly, educating children to become good citizens is crucial for the development of a harmonious and progressive society. Schools play a significant role in instilling values such as honesty, integrity, and social responsibility. By focusing on these values, the education system fosters a sense of community and cooperation among individuals. For instance, if doctors only prioritize personal gain over the welfare of patients, achieving equitable healthcare would be impossible. Therefore, a focus on citizenship within education promotes collective well-being and discourages selfish behavior.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

Secondly, preparing students to be competent workers is essential for the economic growth and stability of a nation. Governments invest substantial resources in the education system with the expectation that it will produce a skilled and morally grounded workforce. If schools were to solely emphasize personal gain, the broader societal benefits would be undermined. The example of Finland’s education system illustrates this well. Finland emphasizes holistic development alongside academic preparation, fostering collaboration, critical thinking, and moral values. This approach has led to a well-rounded and effective education system that benefits both individuals and society at large.

In conclusion, the primary purpose of education should be to develop good citizens and skilled workers. This focus not only benefits individuals but also ensures the overall progress and stability of society.

2. Cách viết PARTLY

The main purpose of schools is a subject of continuous discussion, with some asserting that schools primarily aim to mold children into responsible citizens and effective workers, while others contend that their chief goal is to benefit children on an individual level. I partly agree that schools are primarily intended to transform children into good citizens and workers.

On the one hand, schools undoubtedly play a crucial role in shaping children into responsible citizens and productive workers. Firstly, through civic education, children learn about their rights and responsibilities, fostering a sense of community and societal involvement. In fact, schools teach essential social skills, such as teamwork and communication, which are vital in the workplace. Therefore, the structured environment of schools helps instill a strong work ethic, preparing children for the demands of the professional world.>> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)

On the other hand, schools also significantly benefit children on an individual level. Firstly, education promotes personal development by encouraging students to explore their interests and passions. Critical thinking skills, developed through various subjects, enable students to analyze and solve problems effectively, which is invaluable in both personal and professional contexts. Moreover, schools provide opportunities for children to nurture their creativity and talents, whether in the arts, sports, or academics, leading to a well-rounded and fulfilling life.

In conclusion, schools serve a dual purpose by preparing children to be good citizens and competent workers while also significantly contributing to their individual growth and development.

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